WOW. that was...wow. i'm amazed. that was your first attempt? it certainly doesn't read that way.

and just for the record, i LOVE long stories. and this one just, i dunno. it really hit me, the awkward, thrilling, uncertain path you've weaved. and you really got me at the end. i felt heartbroken for Siathan and for James who was willing to go with him, and then failing... *sigh*. i almost wish it hadn't ended there.

and as for Qiuet Ones, i got a kick out of it. ;)

got any more?

8) sinewa
"Do not adjust your mind; it is reality that is malfunctioning."